一.如何写出简洁的语句
ps:这部分内容不是对全文都适用的,而是对那些需要简洁语句的部分。在不需要简洁的部分,下面的内容可能还是使文章不会用词过于单调的办法,注意区别使用。
1.使用主动语态
在写学术论文时,尽可能使用主动语态。被动语态通常需要更多的词,而且可能导致逻辑混乱。
主动被动语态举例:
主动: The candidate believes that Congress must place a ceiling on the budget.
被动: It is believed by the candidate that a ceiling must be placed on the budget by Congress.
注意:如果句子的主语是匿名的,尝试选一个一般的术语,比如“researchers,”“the study,”“experts in this field.”
什么时候使用被动语态:
(1)强调某一个行为而不是执行者
After long debate, the proposal was endorsed by the long-range planning committee.
(2)为了使文章的主语和焦点保持一致
The data processing department recently presented what proved to be a controversial proposal to expand its staff. After long debate, the proposal was endorsed by. . . .
(3)不想指出作者姓名
The procedures were somehow misinterpreted.
(4)描述一个场景,实施者未知或不重要
Every year, thousands of people are diagnosed as having cancer.
(5)建立权威的语气
Visitors are not allowed after 9:00 p.m.
2.把行动放在动词中
好的:The committee has to approach it differently.
坏的:The establishment of a different approach on the part of the committee has become a necessity.
谨慎名词化:
名词化:An evaluation of the procedures needs to be done.
修改:We need to evaluate the procedures.
名词化:The procedures need to be evaluated.
修改:We need to evaluate the procedures.
名词化:The stability and quality of our financial performance will be developed through the profitable execution of our existing business, as well as the acquisition or development of new businesses.
修改:We will improve our financial performance not only by executing our existing business more profitably but by acquiring or developing new businesses.
3.减少冗余短语(在需要简洁表达的地方使用)
冗余:In a situation in which a class is overenrolled, you may request that the instructor force-add you.
简洁:When a class is overenrolled, you may ask the instructor to force-add you.
冗余:I will now make a few observations concerning the matter of contingency funds.
简洁:I will now make a few observations about contingency funds.
冗余:There is a need for more careful inspection of all welds.
简洁:You must inspect all welds more carefully. / Inspect all welds more carefully.
可以使用下面的词语来减少冗余
(1)because, since, why来替代
<1>the reason for
<2>for the reason that
<3>due to the fact that
<4>owing to the fact that
<5>in light of the fact that
<6>considering the fact that
<7>on the grounds that
<8>this is why
(2)although, even, though来替代
<1>despite the fact that
<2>regardless of the fact that
<3>notwithstanding the fact that
(3)if来替代
<1>in the event that
<2>if it should transpire/happen that
<3>under circumstances in which
(4)when来替代
<1>on the occasion of
<2>in a situation in which
<3>under circumstances in which
(5)about来替代
<1>as regards
<2>in reference to
<3>with regard to
<4>concerning the matter of
<5>where . . . is concerned
(6)must, should来替代
<1>it is crucial that
<2>it is necessary that
<3>there is a need/necessity for
<4>it is important that
<5>it is incumbent upon
<6>cannot be avoided
(7)can来替代
<1>is able to
<2>has the opportunity to
<3>is in a position to
<4>has the capacity for
<5>has the ability to
(8)may, might, can, could来替代
<1>it is possible that
<2>there is a chance that
<3>it could happen that
<4>the possibility exists for
(9)before, after, as来替代
<1>prior to
<2>In anticipation of
<3>subsequent to
<4>following on
<5>at the same time as
<6>simultaneously with
4.减少冗余的动词
使用简洁,直接的动词
(1)knows来替代is aware, has knowledge of
(2)takes来替代is taking
(3)suggests来替代are suggestive
(4)indicate来替代are indications
5.减少不必要的介词短语
有时候,介词短语不是必要的。避免在一句话中使用过多的介词短语
不必要的介词短语:The opinion of the manager
修改:The manager s opinion
不必要的介词短语:The obvious effect of such a range of reference is to assure the audience of the author s range of learning and intellect.
修改:The wide-ranging references in this talk assure the audience that the author is intelligent and well-read.
不必要的介词短语:It is a matter of the gravest possible importance to the health of anyone with a history of a problem with disease of the heart that he or she should avoid the sort of foods with a high percentage of saturated fats.
修改:Anyone with a history of heart disease should avoid saturated fats.
6.减少虚字结构
常见的虚字结构比如it is,there is,there are
尽量少用这种结构,因为它会使句子的主语和行为模糊
虚字结构:It was her last argument that finally persuaded me.
修改:Her last argument finally persuaded me.
虚字结构:There are likely to be many researchers raising questions about this methodological approach.
修改:Many researchers are likely to raise questions about this methodological approach.
虚字结构:It is inevitable that oil prices will rise.
修改:Oil prices will inevitably rise.
7.避免使用模糊的名词
尽量避免使用下面的模糊的,所有都能表示的名词
(1)Factor (2)aspect (3)area (4)situation (5)consideration (6)degree (7)case
模糊名词:Consumer demand is rising in the area of services.
精确:Consumers are demanding more services.
模糊名词:Strong reading skills are an important factor in students success in college.
精确:Students success in college depends on their reading skills.
模糊名词:Photography took on new aspects during the Civil War.
精确:The Civil War saw the advent of graphic battlefield photography.
8.避免使用生僻的词
如果一个简单的短语可以和生僻的词取得同样的效果,要尽量避免使用生僻的词
生僻:cognizant of 简单:aware of, knows
生僻:facilitate 简单:help
生僻:impact on 简单:affect
生僻:implement 简单:start, create, carry out, begin
生僻:subsequent to 简单:after
生僻:utilize 简单:use
9.避免使用名词串
除非读者对你的术语熟悉,否则避免使用连续的名词
名词串:MHS has a hospital employee relations improvement program.
修改:MHS has a program to improve relations among employees.
名词串:NASA continues to work on the International Space Station astronaut living-quarters module development project.
修改:NASA is still developing the module that will provide living quarters for the astronauts aboard the International Space Station.
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